Hello everyone, it’s been a while since I’ve asked a question. Well I need some advice. I plan on transferring next year to SCAD in the winter and I’ve been applying to as many scholarships as I possibly can to help me pay for tuition. Long story short I came across something this is the letter I need to send in to the judge to allow me to be submitted for the scholarship. Critique beginsssssss. NOW.
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Salutations,
My name is —————, I’m a 20 year old inspiring and upcoming animator and sequential artist who is currently attending college at Georgia Perimeter College. I will be transferring next year to Savannah College of Art and Design located in Atlanta to further my studies of the arts. I haven’t actually taken any classes yet at Savannah College of Art in Design, but I’ve been accepted to start in January of 09; the winter quarter. As enthusiastic as I am about going to Savannah College of Art and Design, I also have feelings of discouragement knowing how much tuition is for the school! I’ve been searching the web for scholarships since the summer of 07, when I first started college at Gerogia Perimeter College. Since I didn’t have to pay out of pocket while attending Georgia Perimeter College, I used that time to look up other scholarships online that would help me pay for tuition once I transferred to Savannah College of Art and Design. I received a scholarship from Savannah College of Art and Design for $5,000, but It expired since I had to take an extra 2 semesters at Georgia Perimeter College. I still didn’t let that bring me down, my passion for cartooning and comics was too strong to allow me to just give up. I continued to search the web for scholarships. I knew that there had to be free money available; in the form of a scholarship, for cartoonist who want to pursue a career in animation and sequential art. Waiting for a fortunate college student like myself to discover. While surfing the Internet one day I decided to visit one of my favorite sites for all things art, which was drawn.ca. There was a posted article on the site about a scholarship tcreated in memory of the syndicate editor, Jay Kennedy. As I begin to read the article I was immediately convinced to enter this scholarship. I clicked on the link that led to a page where I could print out an application and enter for a chance to win this amazing scholarship, but then as I read the official rules for the contest it stated that you have to be at least a junior or senior in college. It was sad news when I read this because I’m only considered to be a sophomore now in college. I met all the other qualifications except for that one stipulation. This would have been a perfect opportunity for me to take advantage of, especially considering the fact that the contest is a genre of art targeted mainly towards my area of prestige. My purpose for typing this letter to you is to ask you, if possible could the contest allow a enthusiastic, optimistic, cartoonist like myself to enter for a chance to win the scholarship; even though I’m a sophomore and not yet a junior. I could still use the money either way! I don’t mind working hard to achieve my goal and to get to where I need to be in life. The only blockage that I have in my life right now is the funding that I need to pay for my education. So far, my pell grant has been covering all of my tuition expenses at Georgia Perimeter College; since it’s only a 2 year college. However, when I transfer to Savannah College of Art and Design, I know that I will not be able to lean on my pell grant entirely to get me through college. I’m also doing everything on my own and not receiving any financial help from my mother or family members. It’s involuntary that my family can’t help me due to their financial situation. If they had the money to give me, they wouldn’t hesitate for a second to help me! I also want to avoid taking out any type of loans whatsoever. As I stated earlier, me and my family’s financial situation isn’t the best in the world. We are blessed to be able to make it through each day with a roof over our heads. Especially considering the state of today’s economy! With that being said, It would be crazy for me to take out any type of loan. Me attending college was completely my decision and upon my own discretion. So far, I’ve been doing good and would like to continue on through college without any interruptions are breaks. I only have 2 more years until I actually finish my major and receive my bachelors in animation and sequential art. My dream is to one day own an animation and comic book company, but until that time I must first finish school. Before I get to the point of owning an animation and comic book company I would like to work for Cartoon Network or Teletoon in Canada. Again, the purpose for me writing this letter is to only ask for a chance to prove myself. Is ther
anyway I can enter this contest being that I am a sophomore and not a junior in college. It would be greatly appreciated if there was a way for me to get around this one flaw. Whenever you get the time please respond back to me. Until then, I’ll be busy drawing!
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You need to get to the point. What is it that you’re trying to get across to the reader?
You have so much detail that some of it is not needed.
Just be very blunt and get to the point.
For instance, start off by saying how hard it was for you to find a scholarship and than proceed by saying why you’re applying for this one.
Next cut off all that unnecessary detail, this is an essay not you’re life story. The admissions counselors are going to be reading thousands of essays, so make sure yours is straight to the point.
They don’t need to know about your pell grant, that you’re not yet a junior, that you looked for other scholarships (and by the way why would you tell them that you were looking for other scholarships? Leave that information out) Also don’t talk about your colleges, just say that your transferring to Savannah and need the scholarship to help pay for the fees. Don’t mention anything about George Perimeter.
Furthermore, leave out the information that you were surfing the internet for the scholarship.
Just say that you came apond this scholarship by research and you found out that it was a great fit for you.
Also leave out you’re age if you’re not going to spell out 20!
Also leave out exclamation points that is unprofessional.
And replace me with I.
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Welcome to TWA Summerslam which is the biggest TWA PPV of this Summer
Match 1
World Tag Team Championship
The Brawlers(c) (Regal and Burchill) vs Beer Money Inc. (Storm and Roode)
Match 2
TWA TV Title
Ultimate X match
Ted DiBiase(c) vs RVD vs Cody Rhodes
Promo 1
Edge is Backstage
Michael Cole: Tonight you will face Five challengers for You’re World Title, How do you feel about being put in a match, you know isn’t in your favor?
Edge: How Do I Feel? Less than 48 Hours ago, I was beating the hell out of MVP, for My title it’s something I take pride in, you see it comes as no surprise, TWA would be forcing me, to fight in this match. the powers that be doesn’t want me as Champion… they are afraid my popularity will exceed them…. not only that become larger than TWA itself. I am Benchmark of Wrestling, heck without me, there wouldn’t be Wrestling that’s right I save this business from you Critics and fans..
Michael Cole: Give me a Break ”Rolls Eyes”
Edge: Tonight, I Will Leave with this. (Holds up World Title and leaves)
Match 3
TWA Cruiserweight Title
Jamie Noble(c) vs Rey Mysterio
Match 4
Non-Title match
Natalya vs Trish Stratus
This is One Night Only appearence of Trish Stratus for TWA
Promo 2
CM Punk is seen backstage with Abyss and Gallows*
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*Crowd cheers out a hell yeah, as the screen fades to black
Match 5
TWA Tag Team Championship
Revolution X(c) (Ziggler and Kendrick) vs SES (Abyss and Gallows)
Match 6
World Title
CM Punk(c) vs Batista
Match 7
Casket match
John Cena vs The Undertaker
Promo 3
TWA Chairman Rocky W is in the ring as Rocky says as i promised its time for a huge announcement well i would not be wasting any time so kindly welcome your new Nitro GM as suddenly from the crowd someone enters the ring as the world realises that its JOEY DANNA!!! former Revenge GM as Rocky says yeah he is Joey Danna well Joey welcome back to TWA as Joey says Rocky Rocky Rocky i cant say how much thankful i am to you for hiring me back as Rocky says yeah Joey i know but i hope you will prove that you are the chosen one as Joey says definitely sir!!! as Joey was leaving as Rocky says hey Joey wait a second i got something for you as Joey asks what??? as Rocky says well Joey YOUR FIRED!!! as Joey Danna looks shocked as Rocky starts laughing sorry everyone it was just a joke and nothing else to make things more interesting as Joey and Rocky had handshakes and Rocky leaves as Joey says its time for Nitro to become XTREME
Match 8
TWA Championship
The Rock(c) vs Triple H
Match 9
World Championship
King of the Mountain match
Edge(c) vs MVP vs Desmond Wolfe vs Bryan Danielson vs John Morrison vs The Big Show
Main-Event (If HBK wins he gets Rebecca back to him)
Shawn Michaels before the match says well this isn’t a match for me but this is a fight for my love and for my life and tonight i am going to send Kane back from where he has came yeah and that is HELL!!! oh Kane if your not down with that then I GOT TWO WORDS FOR YA!!!
Hell in a Cell match
Kane vs Shawn Michaels
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WQ: How would you rate TNA’s Hardcore Justice PPV?
Match 1
World Tag Team Championship
The Brawlers(c) (Regal and Burchill) vs Beer Money Inc. (Storm and Roode)
Winner:The Brawlers
Match 2
TWA TV Title
Ultimate X match
Ted DiBiase(c) vs RVD vs Cody Rhodes
Winner:RVD
Match 3
TWA Cruiserweight Title
Jamie Noble(c) vs Rey Mysterio
Winner: Rey Mysterio
Match 4
Non-Title match
Natalya vs Trish Stratus
Winner: Unless The Hart Dynasty interfered, then Trish would win.
Match 5
TWA Tag Team Championship
Revolution X(c) (Ziggler and Kendrick) vs SES (Abyss and Gallows)
Winner: Ziggler and Kendrick
Match 6
World Title
CM Punk(c) vs Batista
Winner: Batista
Match 7
Casket match
John Cena vs The Undertaker
Winner: Undertaker
Match 8
TWA Championship
The Rock(c) vs Triple H
Winner: Hmm, double count out.
Match 9
World Championship
King of the Mountain match
Edge(c) vs MVP vs Desmond Wolfe vs Bryan Danielson vs John Morrison vs The Big Show
Winner: Edge, or Big Show
Hell in a Cell match
Kane vs Shawn Michaels
Winner: Shawn Michalels
Good PPV. Promos were good.
WQ: 8/10
Okay I’ve been really considering a t.b gelding.
he’s a four year old by King’s Best and he’s won a race and placed – the syndicate who own him’s business went bankrupt and their liquidating – horses included I’ve been offered the pick off his racehorses ( theres about 15)
He’s 15.2hh – I’ll have him on the gallops again tomorrow – he’s sound and has a full clean vet cert and he’s bombproof to hack out.
Is it really difficult to stop them galloping everytime you ask for canter – he trots and gallops on voice command ?
Ron sr – my avatar is my irish sport showjumper Ben
He’s just out of training – he was shipped home from the race yard in the uk on friday – So basically the only thing he’s been taught is ”go for broke” And when he starts passing horses on the gallops the more he wants to go – he’s unreal . I Know how to train normal young horses just never dealt with an ottb – he’ll be sent to slaughter if he’s not sold because they need to pay off their creditors.
Of course I know the difference between canter and gallop.
That depends…
1. on the horse
2. on you
Horse: how quick he learns
You:
Have you asked him for a cantor? Ask the current owners if he knows how to cantor on voice command.
Do you know the difference between a canter and a gallop?
Do you know how to train a horse to canter?
Since I don’t know your skill set I asked these open and honest questions. No reason to be on the defensive about them.
Since you know the difference then you are half way there… Now to put that knowledge to use and train.
And since you have training experience its all left up to the horse.
Okay I’ve been really considering a t.b gelding.
he’s a four year old by King’s Best and he’s won a race and placed – the syndicate who own him’s business went bankrupt and their liquidating – horses included I’ve been offered the pick off his racehorses ( theres about 15)
He’s 15.2hh – I’ll have him on the gallops again tomorrow – he’s sound and has a full clean vet cert and he’s bombproof to hack out.
Is it really difficult to stop them galloping everytime you ask for canter – he trots and gallops on voice command ?
He’s really sweet and loves attention – he was shipped home from his racing yard last week.
Will it be hard or how to stop the auto gallop thing ?
I often find that there is a huge misconception when it comes to racehorses. I just answered a race horse related question just a few minutes ago. Contrary to popular belief, racehorses do know quite a few things! I doubt it will be hard to stop him, just make sure not to pull back on the reins when asking him to slow down. This is the cue to hurry up in the racing world which I’m sure you know. (they couldn’t possibly make it easy!) Racehorses spend a large percentage of their training years on a lunge line and just cantering around the track. Breezing a horse during training sessions aren’t a daily thing. Use supple hands and sit down in your seat to ask to slow down. You’ll see this is what a jockey does at the end of a race. Be patient, he may not slow down immediately, eventually it will get better.
In my book their is a government that works in the shadows. Meaning they run everything, unknown to everyone. They are also unreachable and they hold all the governments’ secrets. They’re all old-ish, I suppose – because they’ve been working for the government for a long time. I can’t think of a name for them, though. It has to be something that rolls off the tongue.
Names that are OUT:
The Syndicate, The Elders, The Shadows (it’s all in The X-Files for a similar group.)
I want it to be dark and sound mysterious. Any ideas? I’m totally stuck! Thanks. 
it may not sound too creepy
but what do you think of this,
THE PUPPET MASTERS.
I was wanting a song that sounds very similar to these two. Quick beat, Hardcore.
The forst song is. Lets Light A Fire Tonight – Aiden, well the carious anyway 0:50 – 1:17 http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QSJNGQx_tUU Its kinda what I want. but I prefer the other more.
Which is Sonic Syndicate – Denied This song kicks so much ***. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0t0FGyhB6C8 The whole thing is what I want, especially 1:58 – 2:17. But I over use this song.
The more the song sounds like Sonic Syndicate – Denied the better.
Soil Work – Exile
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x60DdKy1GuY&feature=channel
Dead By April – Losing You
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IoIpxkWzcLM&feature=related
Scar Symmetry – The Illusionist
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XX0p7Y3gND4&feature=related
In Flames – Take This Life
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O1FkbvGl-IU
Blinded Colony – Once Bitten, Twice Shy
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YQUZMKTx57E
All That Remains – The Air That I Breathe
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vq6I2F1NCqM
Dismornia Mundi – Celestial Furnace
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vnIPvSj0ySk
I hope it helps!
im trying to find some dark music (mainly techno but rock too) that don’t have negative messages or lyrics. i know only a few but i know there has to be more out there that what i know of.
here are some that i do know of and someone can build from there
cruxshadows
saviour machine
neuroticfish
midnight syndicate (instrumental music)
raized in black (i like their sound but not what they sing about)
anyone eles know any in that range?
Listen to a band called – Mgmt, try the song "kids" I love it, hopefully you will too
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Album: Roots Radics Meet Soul Syndicate In Dub
198x
Mixing Engineer : King Tubby & Errol Brown & Tony Kelly & Scientist
Producer : Phillip Frazer
Backing Band : The Roots Radics & The Soul Syndicate
Drums : Santa Davis & Style Scott
Bass : George Fullwood & Flabba Holt
Lead Guitar : Earl Chinna Smith
Rhythm Guitar : Bingy Bunny & Tony Chin
Keyboards : Bubbler & Keith Sterling
Piano : Steely
Organ : Gladdy Anderson
Horns : Deadly Headly & Dean Fraser
Saxophone : Tenna
Trumpet : Arnold Breckenridge
Percussions : Scully Simms
Studios :
Recording : Channel One (Kingston, JA) & King Tubby’s (Kingston, JA) & Tuff Gong (Kingston, JA) & Aquarius (Kingston, JA) & Duke Reid’s (Kingston, JA)
Duration : 0:3:14
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